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Cassandra_Sullivan
01-23-2007, 05:36 PM
If these are competition-worthy, I'm open to title ideas too - I have the worst time naming images!

Emily:
http://cassandrasphotography.com/upload/11695768905148_emily.jpg

Susie:
http://cassandrasphotography.com/upload/11695769805332_SUSIE953_final.jpg

Jeff_Dachowski
01-24-2007, 02:26 AM
Hi Cassandra,
I like the second image of these two. I would think about the necklace and it's placement. I also do not care for the presentation. I love the light on her though. It is a lovely portrait, and with some careful work, I think this just might cross the line into comp worthy. I am not a judge though. Just someone who has seen a lot of 80+ prints.
Jeff

D._Craig_Flory
01-24-2007, 02:33 PM
Hi Cassandra;

Well, you nailed one of two. The 1st is too ordinary but I like the 2nd image. I am posting a version I did using the rule of thirds ... putting her on the 2nd quadrant. I totally changed the bkgrd. ... it was competing with the subject layer. I blurred the rough texture cement and the bkgrd. I added an accent line using a color from her hair and didn't use a drop shadow like you did. And, I love how you did her eyes but I added catch lights. Now, viewers eyes will be more drawn to her.

http://i70.photobucket.com/albums/i93/DC47/SUSIE953_Enhanced.jpg

Keith_A_Howe
01-24-2007, 04:22 PM
The second image is my choice. Try to work down the heart. I feel that it may be cropped to tight on camera right cutting off the elbow. Is there a reason you cropped where you did? I do feel that the presentation is a bit busy as well. I can't tell on this file but your eyes look pretty well handled, too many time people whiten the whites of the eyes too much and lose the roundness of the eyeball. D Craig said he added catch lights to the eyes but you already had the catch lights, maybe he brightened them a bit. I tried a diff. crop assuming that you did not have more space as I mentioned above. Here is my take on it. Good Luck
Keith
http://i131.photobucket.com/albums/p308/imager410/cassandrasgirl.jpg

Cassandra_Sullivan
01-24-2007, 06:47 PM
The crop is an in-camera crop so there is no more room. I realized that and that's why I added the 'busy' background so as to give the feel that it's not cropped so tight. Obviously it didn't work. ;) I think the simpler backgrounds are much nicer.
Keith do you think the image loses some impact with your crop? It just seems a little more 'ordinary head & shoulders' to me that way. I'd have to do some work on the heart to tone it down, but if the elbow cutoff would take off points anyway, then maybe the image is just not all there.

D._Craig_Flory
01-24-2007, 07:19 PM
Hi Cassandra;

Another approach can be to either tone tone the pendant or put another less shiny one on top of it. I'm re-posting my version ... but with an entirely different pendant over the original one. Maybe that will help you or someone else who has a problem with something similar.

http://i70.photobucket.com/albums/i93/DC47/SUSIE953_SwitchPendant.jpg