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mbalthaser
03-29-2012, 05:06 PM
I need to pick three of the following images to submit to IPC.... help me choose?

[ONE] Scored 76 at districts. What should I change to make it score better?
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/He_Looks_More_Like_Me copy.jpg

[TWO] Also scored 76 at districts. Again, what should I change to make it score better?
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/The Rain is Gone copy.jpg

[THREE] This one actually scored a 77 at districts last year, but I never sent it on to IPC. In the version below I changed the keyline a bit, and also changed the mat color to gray (originally submitted as black)
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/I_Have_Everything_I_Need copy.jpg

[FOUR] Alternate - never submitted to competition
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/snug as a bug copy.jpg

Sarah_Johnston
04-01-2012, 06:55 PM
On the first one I would crop it in tighter. The story is in the boys faces. Get rid of the legs and feet on our left. Also change the color of your keyline. The white is too stark. Pick a color from the couch. Tho I am not sure doing that will bring it into the merit category. It is a nice sellable image, but there is a lack of expression on the boys. I am not feeling the love. The hand holding the baby would have been better served being slightly under the baby also.
The black and white I feel is your weekest of these.
sleeping baby- take out the white spot on the upper lip and flip the image. Ask is, to me, the viewer comes in from the left and goes right up the babys back and out of the image.
For me flipping it I get into the triangle that is made with the face and arm. I would try to tone down the leg a touch so it doesn't make a competing triangle.

mbalthaser
04-02-2012, 01:18 AM
Thanks so much for the feedback, Sarah, much appreciated. I'm going to play around with them and see what I come up with.... At least I have a bit of time before registration opens...

Does anyone have any thoughts on the little girl looking up? Should I just scrap that one (and the black and white) and look for a replacement?

Sarah_Johnston
04-02-2012, 02:35 AM
Try turning it clockwise to vertical and a different color mat. The black is so heavy for such a fun image.

mbalthaser
04-02-2012, 12:49 PM
Thanks so much for the additional feedback, Sarah... I'll play with the mat and crop and see what I can come up with. I really want to resubmit this image - I've loved it so much since the moment I shot it!

mbalthaser
04-03-2012, 01:18 AM
OK, I know I have a lot of time before registration even opens, but I reworked my strongest three from above and am posting them below. I would love thoughts as to whether or not any of these reworked images will have a shot at a merit or not at IPC. If not, then at least I have time to try to do some shooting.... I just know that I don't have many upcoming shoots that will lend to good competition images (I shoot mostly families, newborns and toddlers), so I'll have to actively seek a shooting opportunity to shoot for competition. So, the more time the better :) I'd really like to gain at least one more merit out of these submissions!

Thanks to anyone who can give me some feedback - that which I've received so far has been so educational and helpful - thank you!

[He Looks More Like Me] 76 at districts, but have since then changed to B&W, recropped...
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/image1.jpg

[Snug As A Bug] Never submitted before...
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/image2.jpg

[The Rain is Gone] 76 at districts, but have since recropped and changed mat color
http://www.melissabalthaser.com/ppa/image3.jpg

Sarah_Johnston
04-03-2012, 02:25 AM
ok so let's see. I like the girl with the flowers much better as a vertical. I think the purple mat tho is still distracting. I would suggest more subtle. You want it to support the image not distract from it.
I like the baby much better flipped. WHat about a square crop? Loose some of the blank space on our right.
The first one- some of those whites look blown out. Use your information pallet and make sure they are 145 or less. pure white is 155 which is no detail. Also if you want it monochromatic try something warmer. I would darken it all down then bump up the yellow and red by 8-14 points to give is more of a brown tone. Play with the sliders til you find a warm brown tone.

Competition is not an easy sport!

mbalthaser
04-03-2012, 01:16 PM
Thanks so much Sarah - all of your feedback has been incredibly helpful.

Yes, I did already check the whites - they were reading at about 141 at the brightest spots. I appreciate you stating that here though, as hopefully it will help someone else. It took me a while before I knew how to properly look for that! And funny, I actually had it as a brown toned b&w, but then switched it b/c this is more customary for me.... but I had liked the brown tone.

I'll keep playing! Thanks again.