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HeatherAllison
03-24-2010, 04:29 AM
Here are some more that go with my other thread, again any suggestions/guidance would be great! Thanks Heather

Keith_A_Howe
03-24-2010, 04:05 PM
Of these 5 I like 3 and 4 the best. On 4 I would suggest cropping off the upper arm and tone down the background. On 3 it will depend alot on detail throughout the image - things there is no way to tell on these small files.
Keith

HeatherAllison
03-25-2010, 04:25 AM
Here is the girl again, bigger image and I did what you suggested Keith!http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/morgan.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=morgan.jpg)

HeatherAllison
03-25-2010, 04:26 AM
Here are the other images you liked, larger file size! Any other suggestions would be great!http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/athens.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=athens.jpg)
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/michelle.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=michelle.jpg)
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/short.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=short.jpg)
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/carson.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=carson.jpg)

Joe_Campanellie
03-25-2010, 05:38 AM
Keith know better than me with his credentials as a judge. But I would try flipping it to see what it looks like. As it is now she's looking "out" of the image. Not that it's bad that way...just may look better flipped. Will give the viewer room to come into the image.

As it is now you come into the side of her face which is the shadow and darkest side of the face and your eye just stops there.

At least mine does. Just my opinion.

HeatherAllison
03-25-2010, 02:11 PM
Any suggestions for the other photos?

Joe_Campanellie
03-25-2010, 03:04 PM
I was talking about the number three image in your original post. The glamour photo.

HeatherAllison
03-25-2010, 03:49 PM
lol ok I was wondering why you would think the other girl needed flipped! Makes sense now!
Here is the glamour one flipped and I see what you are saying now!
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/michelleflip.jpg (http://s98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/?action=view&current=michelleflip.jpg)

Keith_A_Howe
03-25-2010, 05:10 PM
The girl leaning against the post - I feel like she is too soft. Especially in the environment you have placed her. You have this rough post and now it's all soft and velvety looking. I understand this soft look maybe your style but for competition it has gone too far. I like cropping out the top arm, I would also take a little bit more off the right hand side. Her hand is the brightest thing in this image and needs to be toned down.

The shed - I don't say this to be rude, but if ever there was a cliche print competition image it's an old weathered shed. So because it shows up literally hundreds and hundreds of times this subject matter has lost it's ability to create an imapct. So the impact has to come from something else, amazing composition, excellant technical skill, color that creates a wow factor - something besides it just being a an old shed. As a disclaimer I will say I entered an old weathered shed last year and did quite well with it, Loan collection, a Kodak gallery award and a Fuji Masterpiece. So it is possible to do well with this kind of subject. I tried flipping this image, amping up the saturation and contrast and adding a filter to emphazise detail. it helps the image but how much it helps I can't say without seeing an actual print. If there is more space around the shed in the original file so you can keep the top of the tree and have more of the environment that would also help.

The glamour image - I agree with Joe about the flip. On this file, on my moniter there are technical issues that will hold this print back. You have lost the edge of her body along her legs and shoulders. Her back foot and the last two toes on her top foot are gone. There is a big pool of black on the right side (flipped image) where there should be hair swirled on the ground. Now IF on the real image there is detail in all those areas then this would be your strongest image IMO. So I am hoping that the technical problems I see here are just from looking at a low res file.

Maternity image- This is a print where the softness perpetuates the story and mood of the image. I feel like dad's hand is too soft though. IMO the story of dad's hand should be strength and protection so the softness seems wrong. I am concerned if you sharpen dad's hand and leave the rest of the image soft that may be too much of a contrast so I would experiment with finding a happy medium, soft on the whole image but no so soft that dad's hand looks wrong. This is image is an example of what I am looking for on the glamour image. Even though there are deep shadows on this image, we still see details in those areas. They are not completely obliterated.

The boy in the snow - After seeing it larger I would probably suggest choosing something else to enter. There are some technical issues with exposure and what appears to be a miss on focus but those could be improved. What can't be fixed and doesn't work here IMO is the eyes closed. Maybe if his head was thrown back, arms flung out to his sides and he was sticking his toungue out to catch the snowflakes . . . Then it would be a story of this boy interacting with the falling snow. As as it stands, it's just a portrait of a boy and there is no apparent reason for his eyes to be closed. If you decide to go ahead with this image you need to fix the two dark lower corners. If there is snow on the ground then those corners should be light not dark.

Hope some of this is helpful. Remember this is just one opinion and there are 6judges on a panel at international.

Keith

HeatherAllison
04-11-2010, 03:16 AM
Here is the girl and the glamour image. I started over with both. Let me know what you think, thanks!

http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/morgan-1.jpg
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/michelle16x20.jpg

HeatherAllison
04-11-2010, 05:42 PM
Here is the belly one again. I retouched the dads hand less to give it more a masculine feel.
http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l259/xpressionsbyheather/short16x20.jpg